Serria Submaster: Serria`
Posts : 193 Join date : 2010-08-22 Age : 31 Location : Canada
| Subject: Random Creativity <3 Sun Sep 12, 2010 7:53 am | |
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Started working on a novel of sorts and thought I'd share with my clover family because ... Well, I love you all that much :D I've only just started working on it a few hours ago so I only have a preview of the prologue for you. I'd love some feedback on it x_x Be forewarned, this has been heavily influenced by fantasy XD
So, this is sort of the interpretation of the beginning of the world in my story ( I haven't titled it yet ) . I hope you like it~ :D
I still haven't read over this yet so a few grammatical errors may have slipped past me. Moreover, lots of the terminology won't make sense yet but I am just too sleepy to add explanations now 8D ( /shot`d )
Also up here as per requested by Rox and Sho 8D
- PREVIEW OF PROLOGUE:
At the beginning, there were three deities fueled by the endless energy of veta; the lovely Vita, the gentle Levis and the mysterious Umbra. Feeling alone and empty, Vita proposed the idea of creation to Levis and Umbra. Thrilled by the idea of putting his powers to use, Levis created the sun and gave it a clear blue backdrop he called “sky”. Unwilling to be bested by Levis, Umbra created the moon to drain the sun’s energy. Further, he attempted to create something greater than Levis’ beautiful blue sky but his creation, much heavier than Levis’ light airy sky, sank below the sky forming what became known as “earth”.
In addition to the sun, the moon, the sky and the earth, Vita created water to flow freely from sky to earth and vice-versa in the form of what she named “rain”. Vita brought order to this new world by establishing day and night. Levis’ brilliant sun would hang high in the bright blue sky during the day but once night fell, it would slip out of the sky for the moon to shine in its stead.
Fueled by the idea of a contest, Levis and Umbra continued to create. Levis put clouds in the sky to decorate the backdrop of new life and Umbra raised and parted the earth to form mountains and valleys.
The stage had been set but no players were to be seen.
Vita, realizing the error of their ways, approached Levis and Umbra with the suggestion of creating lower forms of life to grow in this new land they had created.
Out of flesh and bone, Levis created beautiful figures, beings with bright blue eyes to look upon the equally blue sky and remember their creator. These were mere husks even once Levis had completed his task; after all it was Vita who held the power to give the blessing of life.
Of the same flesh and bone used by his companion, Umbra created beings similar to those of Levis’ but with deep emerald green eyes so their eyes may reflect the green earth he had formed. These creatures too were but lifeless dolls waiting to be blessed by the Goddess Vita.
Pleased with the works of her two complements, Vita blessed the two new races with beautiful names. To the children of Levis, she gave the name Concorus. To the children of Umbra, she gave the name Discorus. As she blessed the two new forms of life with Life, Vita granted them both the power to harness the life source – veta – around them and to use as they desired…
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Killer_In_Haze A Clover
Posts : 250 Join date : 2010-06-28 Age : 26 Location : Ma House
| Subject: Re: Random Creativity <3 Sun Sep 12, 2010 9:37 am | |
| i didnt get it......u said u luv all......i luv Æ most >_> :shock: :o :o :shock: :bounce: :bounce: :scratch: :scratch:
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L. Pigeon Master: Elairep
Posts : 222 Join date : 2010-08-18 Age : 35 Location : Look behind you.
| Subject: Re: Random Creativity <3 Sun Sep 12, 2010 9:43 am | |
| Looks good so far.
Good luck. | |
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Guest Guest
| Subject: Re: Random Creativity <3 Sun Sep 12, 2010 1:02 pm | |
| Looks like a great foundation for a very good story.
Keep going keep going. 8D |
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Sho Submaster: Sho`
Posts : 71 Join date : 2010-07-22 Age : 34 Location : RIGHT behind you.
| Subject: Re: Random Creativity <3 Sun Sep 12, 2010 8:03 pm | |
| Niiice O: Can't wait to see more of it | |
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